ChristataAstera

Hi! This is a really cool poem because I've never seen the haiku format incorporated into a longer "traditional" poem. I love the feel of this piece. It's just so ...

Already on chapter four! How time flies.... Lets do this!*cracks knuckles* I think 'the close street lamp' would better as 'the closest street lamp' 'Start' should be 'starts' 'Ive bet ...

Hey! Lets get this started, shall we? First of all, at the beginning of this story, you mentioned Forseti being one of the people already there, but later Heimdall is ...

This is excellent, well done! I love the way this story is executed. I nearly gasped when I realized she was in a hospital. I really did not see that ...

I liked this chapter. It explained a lot, and you had some great imagery. :) I feel like the explanation of Pleasance's mark was a bit too lengthy, and it ...

Hey! I'm back! Okay, this was an interesting chapter. I'm gonna go straight to the nitpicks. In the first couple paragraphs, I feel like you were saying 'he' too much. ...

Wow. This was....intense, to say the least. I love the build-up and the descriptions and the pure terror portrayed in the carnage. Just wow. It was done perfectly. I did ...

This is fantastic. I love the idea, the formatting, the imagery, everything. I like how there's a classic poem-esque rhythm even though its written in prose. It feels like it ...

This piece is really, really cool. I love the emotion and imagery used throughout the story. It definitely gave me sense of wonderment and sadness, if that makes sense. Most ...

Hey there! I really liked your poem, especially the ending. It has a bit of a trite concept, but it was executed well enough so that it is still quite ...

Hi, it's me again! I love this poem, it's so emotional and well thought out. For some reason, it reminds me of an old, passionate letter (the kind you'd burn ...

This is an excellent poem. I love the imagery, and the way you described certain things, especially the blue jeans. This oozed summer. I did notice some grammatical errors, but ...

This is a lovely poem with lovely imagery! The descriptions are really nice as well as the similes. Very well done. I'm gonna get a bit nitpicky, so bear with ...

Okay first of all, I love Alice in Wonderland and Norse mythology so this is basically a dream come true. Very original crossover. I like it. A lot. The imagery ...

This is such a cute story, you have no idea. I love how original it is despite the somewhat trite concept. The word use and imagery is really effective, and ...