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Okay, sorry but this throws me off. I read ArtStyx's review, well the top of it, but I felt the same way. The moment I read the first paragraph, I ...

Whoa the end if that was like wow. Her birthright to kill her parents (now that is something unheard of and I loved it.) I only saw one mistakes. But ...

As Aiden stole into her space, Mercy took compensating steps back toward the wall, until she bumped it with a second nauseating wave of finality. "As Aiden strolled into her ...

Many hardships followed but Emma's mom recovered and Emma also. You could just say Emma and her mom recovered. I know your not suppose to put yourself first, but this ...

So I wasn't going to review this one because you already have 16 people who reviewed it, but hey one more can't hurt right. Especially if I pick up on ...

Suffocated from the desperate need to scream. I still feel the same about the line. I feel as though 'suffocated' should be 'suffocating'. Also in the first paragraph, I feel ...

Okay First I was confused and like what the h**l, but then I went back and looked at the second one and I was like Oh okay it was changed. ...

Two words. OH MY. Four words. YOU BETTER KEEP WRITING. I wanna know what happens next. Okay so I really only saw one mistake when reading through the first time. ...

Heyo, Sharrae Here for a review. Firstly, “ D id I hide for so long?” I get why you italicized hide but I don't think you need to. Oh and ...

Emma had managed to knock out the man, Eliot who kidnapped and tortured her to get information on her sister. Now she just had to get help before he woke ...

Hey hey, here like ya want. She dripped with blood; her head had a big gash and her legs throbbed with incessant pain. Nice word usage, 'incessant' was a really ...

Here. Not to mention that it’s freezing down on the ground. If we could take a higher path. The roads maybe. After 'the roads maybe', I think you should explain ...

Wow...I've never read anything like this. This um...I don't really know how to explain it. Although I agree with @BEWriter I am a little confused and it does seem like ...

Hey Hey, Sharrae here for a review. Firstly, here. Svartalon hurriedly pushed the welling tears from his face and rushed towards the notes sprawled across his Darkwood desk. You don't ...

'the cry persisted and intensified louder and pierced the sensitive ears of all of the creatures in the land of the Inuits.' 'The cry persisted and intensified louder; piercing the ...