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You had a great concept, but it didn't seem to flow very well. There were a few lines that caught my attention such as: "Why?" I thought to myself. Images ...

"you know i'd die for you if you stopped running from accidents if you stopped pretending to be distant if you stopped killing those who love you most " I'm ...

Yes, I would have to agree with Bubblewrapped. Sometimes rhyming poetry can really take away from the poem. It would also be nice if you dug back into the memory ...

"i wrote this when i was really, really depressed...... " Yes, the title alone is evidence. I must say, I have several poems written almost just like this. You were ...

I'd have to agree with Helen (Rei). Most poems written by teenagers are written about suicide and how someone did them wrong. Heh...it's all I write about. I must say, ...

This is the kind of poem you'll find in a collection of poetry 50 years from now. I loved how you repeated "City lit by fireflies." It was very innovative. ...

Wow. I really wish I could write like this. Perhaps I'll be there someday. However, there were a few things I was confused about: "Is their a reason for art? ...

How am I supposed to comment if I can't read it? : Shrugs : Anyhow, I'm assuming this is from a journal or something. And if it was, it was ...

I'd like to describe this poem as being more abstract than anything. "When you ran your fingers down my back, I bled. when she runs her fingers down my back, ...

I like this a lot. It was very literal and narrative... "Well we went to a movie and we went back to your house and I am not a virgin ...

jack--im like so impressed. i dont really know what to say. "when it all falls down, flag at half-mast, scarves held proudly the tears will flow from the streets to ...

Hm...I don't know how it was trivial or random...but then again I'm Morgan and a little slow. Anyway, there was like no dialogue at all and I'm surprised I still ...

It started off fast paced, and had a neat little rhthym to it. However, when I reached "of bloody shrieks and white teared cries" there was an extreme lack of ...

The title is righteous--so creative, in my opinion at least. "the remainder of our time together to fizzle out like fireworks" --How did you come up with that? Anyway, I ...

This reminds me of something that I wrote when I was around your age. Except, mine rhymed and was just a flat out disasterpiece. The fact that you're 11 really ...