Brad you are absolutely brilliant. 
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That's what I thought.
I agree with what most other people have said, great lineas and lexis and ideas and everything. You can feel the power behind it. I didn't like the last three lines, even though I can see why you did them so, because they sound childish. Maybe that's just me.
But I really liked this, kudos. It certainly is a mutual idea, Brad.
Don't have much to say except that it was excellent and each line was extraodinarly well-written; definitely one of your best.
Very dirty though, lol
Love it Brad, ver nice.
:snicker:
It's called french-kissing.
a-hah...a-hah...I gotcha.
'If I wanted to taste the back of your throat
and mark it with wild graffiti--my wild graffiti--
I would, and that
is why
I did.'
I am getting...a...polar bear in a snowstorm.
I know you supposed to be doing poet-y metaphorical things but...what the freak...
I know I sound like an idiot, but wouldn't you be gagging the person?
absolutely brilliant
holy crimany this is so good....
wow
*blinks*
That's DIRTY.
The title is righteous--so creative, in my opinion at least.
"the remainder of our time together to fizzle out like fireworks"
--How did you come up with that? Anyway, I liked it.
"I can only watch myself fall into you"
--For whatever reason, I was reminded of...Ryan Cabrera...
"I don’t want you to hold doors open for me or pay
for my meal, I don’t want to hear you say, “I love you”
because I am not your object to love. “I love to you” is what I want..."
--I love this stanza. It's like a twist...and the end of a story...
"If I wanted to taste the back of your throat "
--That was the only part I didn't really get.