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Re: In the end
In all honesty, the only line I really liked was "Your loyalty was no longer to me." The rest seemed really cliche. However, I do not feel that this is ...
Jan 30, 2008 -
Re: Ready your swords
Brad, I didn't have a problem connecting anything together here, and I thought it was probably the most powerful and moving poem you've written. The chaos and confusion others had ...
Jan 14, 2008 -
Re: for the birds who went south last winter
Oh Brad, this is so heartbreaking! You sound so sad and lonely in the recording, and I just want to reach out and hug you. I know you're not going ...
Dec 5, 2007 -
Re: First and Last, Beginning and End
I'm not really sure I grasped the meaning of this poem, but I do know, I appreciated the language used in this piece greatly. You had my attention from beginning ...
May 22, 2007 -
Re: She laughs
it was kind of scatter brained in the beginning but it improved in the third stanza. i kind of like that feel, but my only problem would be that it's ...
May 20, 2007 -
Re: We're all wearing masks...
I think "We're all wearing masks" is to cliche to be repeated so many times. Other than that, it wasn't astounding, but fair enough to get by I suppose. Tell ...
May 20, 2007 -
Re: home sweet home
It was a little cliche up until "Angels" and from then on, it was a rather enjoyable piece. I could almost do without everything before that line. I also love ...
Apr 28, 2007 -
Re: Modern World
Concerning the first stanza, I guess it depends on what style of writing appeals to you. I personally am a very much a literal person so the first stanza was ...
Apr 28, 2007 -
Re: This Crazy Game
You have great imagery, I must say. Rhyming a little off it some places but it's alright. Not sure I can say I'm a huge fan of the title, I ...
Mar 31, 2007 -
Re: attempt at universality (you may now laugh)
The first stanza was great, the second stanza even better. Not a huge fan of the third, but the fourth brought it all full surface. Like Jack said, you definitely ...
Mar 31, 2007 -
Re: The Theology of Sleep
In my personal opinion, I thought it was beautiful. It was a little hard for me to catch on in the first few lines because I wasn't sure where you ...
Mar 31, 2007 -
Re: A Free Verse Piece -
I really enjoyed this. It was very descriptive and insightful. However, I think the fourth stanza was probably your weakest. It didn't seem to fit the calibur of the rest ...
Mar 31, 2007 -
Re: Lovers & Thieves
Wow, I love the theme. 'Lovers and Thieves' really rang a bell for me. It was repetitive/consistent enough to be a song, but wasn't at all hasty or overbearing. I ...
Mar 29, 2007 -
Re: Words of the Wise
Wow, I love the brightness...the provocativeness. It was very stimulating, and I must say the rhythm added to that tremendously. Usually, I am not the greatest fan of the repetition ...
Mar 29, 2007 -
Re: Beneath the Sheets
The attitude of this piece seemed to be very short and to the point. Also a little rush, but it sounded great. Not only did I read through it smoothly, ...
Mar 28, 2007
