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The theme of "dried apricots" really held this poem together. I could tell that this was a heart-felt piece. A little melancholy, yes yet it wasn't intolerable. As already implied, ...

I like the use of adjectives particularly the use of colors. There was definitely a healthy balance between the "red light" and the "white light" allowing for easy subconscious comparison. ...

You have a beautiful way with words. A very conscious and observant writer and I enjoyed reading the poems that I did, particularly the first one. My only critique is ...

Liking the theme here. The preface to the poem really does help with the poem itself. I suppose I read it reader-responsively considering my sister once suffered with a severe ...

I honestly have no critique for this. Not to say that it is perfect, but I feel as if this were driven nicely and well organized. However, for or some ...

This poem was very effective in the way that it was slightly abstract, yet objective. I particularly like the fifth line, as it implied modernity's relation to what I found ...

I really like the tone of this. However, I feel as if it could still be achieved without some of the adjectives you used such as: Tormented by the winter ...

Interesting. Kind of reminds me of a "Practices and Philosophies" excerpt tagged at the end of a book of Oscar Wilde essays. Both of these poems have great topics, and ...

I really like where this is going. Perhaps, just as a suggestion, you could try this as a begin to prose instead of poetry. I'm not sure why, but this ...

"Smoking Camels on Your Grave" Interesting way to personify cigarettes, I like that. I felt that the poem as a whole was a bit typical, and more imagery is needed ...

This is kind of like the epilogue to something I wrote just the other day. I get this vibe that this is other words, raw which I am very much ...

I like the transition from lyrical to dramatic. A beautiful story, and the imagery really holds it together. The romantic aspect of it was also quite strong. " I later ...

First off, great title. It gives the poem kind of an arrogant (but healthy) precedent. However, despite that, I am having difficulty picking up on the tone. Even though it's ...

I have to say, I really like the title but I feel like it is too short. While historically a short poem has accomplished a lot (William Carlos Williams), this ...

Full inner weather and strife Why not a Doctor, a Lawyer, A Butcher with a knife? No, you gave me paper And what do I do with it? I really ...