Cassandra

Lemme tell you what happens as soon as I click this link, Snoinkus: --I check how long the story is (One black mark next to my name as a critiquer) ...

I agree with DD about the length--it's perfectly fine for this poem. And Clau! Weren't you just saying a few months ago that you can't write or crit poetry? Because ...

So. I don't know anything about Tov, besides that in the Character Answer Game over on Writing Activities his answers are always amusing. I also don't know much about the ...

I wish it was the strawberries and cream I usually associate these colours with, but its doctors coats and blood. I wish it were ...but it's doctors' coats and blood. ...

This poem gives a nice effect, as many others have said: Though it has an innocent title, it has this feeling about it...very good, Clau. :D The one line that ...

Sorry if I repeat anything that anyone else has already said... Sensuret wasn’t sure what to make of that, this didn’t look at all like a demon. Instead of the ...

First off, sorry if I repeat anything Myth has already said--I haven't read through her crit. The first thing I noticed here is that you throw a lot of names ...

"Are you ok?" I think (someone correct me if I'm wrong) that you should write out "okay" instead of just "ok". I sighed, compared to her, I always looked weird; ...

So I get to be the first to crit C1? *dances* :D owners of the shed had been friendly enough people; This sounds awkward: I would consider cutting the word ...

In his right hand, he held the reins of two llamas, beasts the Moche respected and loved for their life-giving capacities. You don't need the first comma in this sentence, ...

I agree with Jennafina about this piece lacking action--this seems like a lot of teenage angst to me. Tears filling my eyes but do you even know. This is a ...

It's fantastic the way you start off with action. Your first sentence hooks the reader right off the bat, which is, of course, key. Glancing around, I was glad to ...

The idea of this is what kept me hooked, most definitely--I mean to say, it kept me thinking, "What the--?" the entire time. But in a good way! ;) The ...

First off, your prose and description were beautiful. Apart from the one typo below, I don't have much to pick at. Nice work! Let’s go for a walk” I demanded, ...

“What’s up,” I say "What's up?" is a questions, so drop the comma and use a question mark instead. Joe is Filipino and a prominent member of the Asian clique ...