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  • Short Story » General, General Re: September the 6th, 2001

    This was a unique point of view I wasn't expecting, but it worked! It didn't occur to me from the title what this would be about, but I started making ...

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: What Was I Thinking Again?

    I really enjoyed this. Your style was amazing plus you had the cynical voice going as well. I think this was the perfect length for this type of piece: longer ...

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: what are we here for

    This doesn't really fit in this forum: the literary forums are for short stories, novels, plays, and poems. Right now, this seems more like an idea: perhaps you could develop ...

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: One Fall

    First of all, nice work! You did a nice job working with such a small amount of words, and I liked that there weren't really any huge info dumps. It ...

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Phantom of the Opera?

    Isn't the whole Opera Ghost thing something that actually happened, though? That's the idea I got from the beginning of the book, but what you said, Broken Sword, is making ...

    Apr 30, 2007
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: A Prologue

    Sorry ahead of time if I repeat anything that's already been said! The day of Announcement had finally arrived. You might consider capitalizing The Day of Announcement if it's a ...

    Apr 18, 2007
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Lord of the Flies

    I read it last year on my own and this year in class: I found I liked the book a lot better on the second reading. Either way, it's very ...

    Apr 18, 2007
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Hourglass No.1

    I really enjoyed reading this--I was hooked right away, and I definitely was interested throughout the entire thing. And of course, there were no spelling/grammar errors; a nice breath of ...

    Mar 17, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Yin Yang

    I really enjoyed this: you captured the moment really well, like a snapshot in time. My biggest suggestion, besides a few grammar mistakes below, is to make sure you're showing, ...

    Mar 17, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Chicken Little

    Just was once your typical, ordinary teenage boy Just? Did you mean "Jude"? He has his click of friends, You changed tenses in this sentence (had), and I think it's ...

    Mar 17, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Swamp

    Your description is superb; I can definitely picture this scene. I think you should add more background on the man, mostly because I'm confused about where and why he lives ...

    Mar 17, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: It won't kill anyone

    To echo everyone else, I like the idea behind this, of everything being related and intertwined! Of coarse, there were rumours that it was another terrorist attack, but these were ...

    Mar 17, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Looking for an Idea – 1/16/01

    a clean sheet of paper, and a clean space to write in. Once I looked down at my clean piece of paper, I knew what I forgot; an idea. Clean, ...

    Jan 23, 2007
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Sisters

    " Your late! You're late, because the contraction "you're" is short for "you are". A cloaked figure scurried into the small hut from the snow and winds outside. The figure ...

    Jan 22, 2007
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: This Piano Is Not For Sale

    I can't crit poetry for beans, but I'll tell you the parts I liked. :D These were my favorite lines: I’m a little rusty, but so is the piano. And ...

    Jan 16, 2007


It's been many years since I had such an exemplary vegetable.
— Mr Collins, Pride and Prejudice