CardDragon

This was a very good poem. It worked for the poem that the words didn't also has a good point, you can understand it clearly. The main character listens to ...

This is a good story, full of descriptions and the main characters thoughts. The dream perfectly describes what happened to the character and her life. Basically she is competing for ...

This was saying nicely, a bad poem. It didn't rhyme nor did it have an exact point. It is not amazing how of billions of planets some can have life. ...

In short this poem was not horrible, but it could use some work. Still it is good for a book character to say. You may want to use a metaphor ...

It is a good story, but I agree with ReicePiecey you should describe the characters a bit more along with the fighting scene. For example you can use... 1. slashed ...

Hello, Card Dragon here. Well your poem is not as interesting. It is just a bit dull, but it has a point : You can not stop the flow of ...

Well its not much of a prologue, it should be placed in the beginning of chapter one. There is no telling what the story is going to be about, but ...

I really did not get why you called it magic(because I am not you). None of the stuff refers to magic, except how fast things can change( and that is ...

Hello this is cardDragon, though I speak little Spanish, but the computer doesn't. It is a good poem but a bit confusing. It says in ruff English translation: One night ...

It is a cool story that just goes not to fast. It is not normal paced though, it is kinda hard to in-vision the transition from her being in the ...

This sounds familiar....Like it is what happened after that book series ended. It sounds like an Apocalypse for that continent. Obviously I would suggest to you to make it a ...

Hello.... This sounds more like a song. Than a poem. It could use some work. This work is like a mix between a poem and a song. But also good ...

Does this story have a point? Yes, Harri is going on a journey to find her parents to go on an unknown Quest. Is it original? Yes it is original ...