Calligraphy

Thank you guys you really helped. I didn't have enough time to edit everything before the due date (a half an hour ago), but I did do a lot. For ...

Thankyou!!

Oh thanks so much guys one, two, ... five reviews to read! Well, I better get started thanks for all the help! A. S.

Thanks, El. :) That really helps. The reason I had her say "Does daddy still live here?" is because I said that to my mom when I was little...

I agree with simplycomplex you should have different stanzas, but besides that I just wanted to say this is awesome. Know I didn't help, A. S.

to move turbulently : be in a state of turbulence or agitation. - Thanks for the review :)

Thanks, but I wrote this a long time O.K. :D A. S.

Thank you! All of you really helped. I will try to make some changes. A. S.

Thankyou! A. S.

Hmmm I like your second Idea better :D

ummm, wow.... I ..... uhhhh, didn't get it... reallllyyy. I feel stupid right now. :| A. S>

Hmmmm I would make these lines shorter...... Then I will review it. Plus, some of the best poems don't rhyme. A. S.

Thanks, that was very helpful. A. S.

Yeah, I know some Christians that are like that to me and I am a Christian. So, I know what you mean. The poem is very good... A. S.

Thank you for the advice Kyousuke. Sorry, the rest of you didn't help. :) I will try to revise it and make it better. A. S.