Boxed
Loving trust, we all must-
Jumble, mumble spurs of wonder
turn into a childlike hunger
Hollow sounds resound around
a tiny hole beneath
the ground
Bubbles pop rainbow clouds, castles, clowns
call to us we don't hear
the sounds they make
voices cheer
Squeezed shut, minds close, eyes dark
Heaven glows but no one answers
the door or plead
Our march
goes on
Wish-wash, splish-splash, lips mash
twitching thoughts inching over
in frustration of what-is-what
our knowledge but finite
in everything
we touch
Poisonous venom spread red
across the veins in
our mute brains
spreading wide
all throughout
vast seas of
goodbye
To piqué the curiosities means
to satiate the thirst acquired
but since such a thirst
no longer exists
we'll wait here
until we are
all merely
expired
*I had more to this, but I trashed it. Tell me if you want/need more.*
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ummm, wow.... I ..... uhhhh, didn't get it... reallllyyy. I feel stupid right now.
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I like your poem.
I think the length is fine.
Hopefully my suggestions help you.
Have a great day. Fiction