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I just really felt like this was missing punctuation and capitalization. I know it's a poem and doesn't need that, but I find it distracting. Could you maybe, possibly add ...

So, this piece isn't terrible, and if I knew the story I bet it would even be funny. But... as it is, I am wondering why in the world this ...

Like it, but I feel like there were places where the rhythm was messed up. Of course, I was reading it as a poem, not a song, and I am ...

Well, I loved the idea, and yes, I am too young for love, even if I'm realizing a little late. :( Already been mentioned, I know, but you have so ...

So, in a few places it felt awkwardly worded, like your commas were in the wrong place or something. Anyway, I loved the idea and the descriptions and all. Good ...

First, I like the title, although it might be too dark for this particular poem. But... I don't know... ignore me... You always loved her She was always your favorite ...

I liked it, very short and peaceful, at first. I loved how you said, "a tear drops from the faucet" it showed that the poem wasn't just a happy peaceful ...

Due to your lack of stanzas, I felt like the whole poem was rushed. I didn't have time to let the words sink in because I was just trying to ...

My first kiss was a goodbye kiss, I agree with the kiss/kiss repetition. Though, depending on how the song sounds it could work. my my my first word was goodbye, ...

I love it!! It's so simple and yet filled with emotion. I wished it was longer, but I realized if it was it wouldn't be quite as good. I have ...

Lots of emotion in here, it clearly expresses what you are trying to say. I was wondering if there are any reasons for the size of each stanza? It bugged ...

You have no punctuation... but, I suppose since it's poetry it isn't all that necesary. It kind of bugged me that the last stanza was longer... I guess I'm just ...

Hm, I wish I had a good review. But I don't. I noticed absolutely no mistakes (except the one pointed out by priceless.) It was a beautiful poem, so simple ...

Before anything, the first time I read this, I had no clue what the point was. It felt like your ideas were jumbled and rather unclear. Also, stanza breaks would ...

Very good story. It caught my attention and interest. I like how it started out, like Ang said, like Madeline. Then, it turned into a story about Angels and all. ...