Cailey

I really liked it. Great metaphors and desriptions. I noticed one or two typos, but I'm sure someone else has already pointed them out. Anyway, I had to let you ...

I really liked this, but it didn't feel all that poetic to me. the first stanza did, and the second was okay. However, all in all, it felt like prose ...

Wow, this is great. However, in the first part you said, "not the figurative kind," however, the second paragraph it sounds like you are only talking about the figurative kind. ...

So cute, and yet sad how you end it with the implication the person you're talking to isn't yours. Of course, I wish you would elaborate. Why do you know ...

I really don't want to sound harsh. However, this needs work. I know it's a diary, I know it was written from the point of view of someone who lived ...

Lion, lion where art thou? Between this and your introduction, I'm already hooked. :) Hiding in these darkest dreams. You may prowl and try to hide, but I can feel ...

Before anything, I like the title. :) It's a poem in itself. a slender, fragile age of seventeen. the sky was crying for her, for all the tears she held ...

Good, but this doesn't have enough emotion. I think your character would feel so much more strongly about this. You just say it almost casually, as if you don't really ...

He trod upon the waters as if they were a grassy meadow. He fed the multitudes with food fit barely fit for one man. He caused the weak to stand ...

Awe!! It's so sad and emotional and makes me want to cry. It almost sounds like your friend is dying! Seriously, how in the world can you make it sound ...

This is really good, but I'd say it could use some work. First off, you should read it out loud a few times, there are places when the flow gets ...

It's very very very short. And it doesn't really say much, of anything. I guess if it got rid of writer's block it's good, but as a poem, it needs ...

Words on lined paper Blur Tears burn their acidweet trail Acid-sweet. :D Down the toocold skin too cold. Of my face Love the imagery here! Why is the toocold skin ...

I'm scared to review this, you've already gotten so many reviews, I feel like I will just be repeating what's already been said. I need help believing, That you are ...

Here is another review for you. Sorry I won't be able to review them all today, but I'm doing my best. This was a good story, but it seemed distracted, ...