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Tears burn their acidweet trail
Down the toocold skin
Of my face
Why is the toocold skin
Burning
With the hot embarassment
Heat flooding heartheadface
Absorbing me
The heat cracks my frozenice
Soul
And my toostrong toobig toougly body
Shakes with the angergriefsadness
Of loss
Memories of a happy time
Toobright
Tooglittering with the unreality of pasttimes
Opening like woundsrivers flowing
I can't hide
Why do the toopainful memories
Emerge?
Because we are toohuman tooalive
To believe that the brightglitteringpowerful memories
Don't matter.
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Words on lined paper
Blur
Tears burn their acidweet trail #4000BF ">Acid-sweet.
Down the toocold skin #4000BF ">too cold.
Of my face #4000BF ">Love the imagery here!
Why is the toocold skin #4000BF ">space!
Burning
With the hot embarassment
Heat flooding heartheadface #4000BF ">Space...
Absorbing me
The heat cracks my frozenice
Soul #4000BF ">frozen ice soul, I like it!
And my toostrong toobig toougly body
Shakes with the angergriefsadness
Of loss #4000BF ">Lots of emotion, but the stucktogether words bug me. At least add a dash.
Memories of a happy time
Toobright
Tooglittering with the unreality of pasttimes
Opening like woundsrivers flowing #4000BF ">Doesn't sound like a happy time.
I can't hide
Why do the toopainful memories
Emerge?
Because we are toohuman #0000BF ">Comma.tooalive
To believe that the brightglitteringpowerful memories
Don't matter.#4000BF ">So, is your point that they do matter or they don't matter? Make your point clear, obvious. Don't make it so vague and confusing. And, I realize this is probably super old... but anyway, I like it.
Thanks!! This was my first experiment with combined words. I'm glad you like it.
I didn't understand this the first time I read it, but the second and third, I got it.
This was pretty creative. I always like it when poets mess with words. I get so frustrated when people don't understand my wordings in poetry.
But, again, creativ and well written.