Published September 7, 2011
If I'm too young to know "I love you,"
Then I believe I've found my age.
It's time, my dear, to tell the truth,
I'll only take about a page.
Your mouth is crooked when you smile,
Your personality does it shine.
I love everything about you,
But I wish that you were mine. 
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This is kind of messed up, the fact that they love them but they aren't together. That stuff is just sad, it makes me afraid of love I've never experienced it and after what I have seen I'm not sure I want to. But all in all this was pretty cute I like the rhyme and even with crooked teeth they shine that's a nice thought.
You could make this poem longer but it's so sweet. I can relate! I love the last two lines. I agree with you that age doesn't matter when it's love. I don't exactly get what you're talking about the second line. I get what you're trying to say but you should make it clearer. This is a good and cute poem. It has potential. Good job!
So cute, and yet sad how you end it with the implication the person you're talking to isn't yours. Of course, I wish you would elaborate. Why do you know now that you've reached the age? If you've known before that you're too young, why do you now sound so convinced that you're old enough? Also, I am wondering about your stanzas, why four, three, one? Maybe I've just spent too much time in English class, but I feel like if you're going to write a poem you must have a reason for all of it. Even if your reason is simply, that is how it looks best. Anyway, it did seem like a weird place to break. I do say, this is really good, but it's a start. You should add more, give us details, add imagery. Make us feel what you're feeling. I'm serious, make your readers fall in love with the character whom is being adressed here. Hope I've helped a bit, keep writing!
Overall I thought this was a nice poem, but even though I kind of like the fact that it's short I feel like you could still build on it too. Not a lot, but just enough to come to more of a final conclusion. But all-in-all, I liked this.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver