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hi, The concept is solid, I'm always a fan of high fantasy. I think you had difficulties sustaining the magniloquent tone this is written in. It borders on parodic at ...

hi there This is not bad. I think it would benefit of more description. The most relevant example is when you dedicate a paragraph to telling us about the king's ...

not bad, but not something that draws me in either. It poses the problem every long, expository prologue does, for me: it's hard to care about the beginnings of a ...

Heyo. Not soon, but I did say 'I promise', so here I am. I'd rather review things in order though, so this isn't what you linked me to. I think ...

Hello friend, This is the second post-apocalyptic sci-fi I've read in two days. This is irrelevant to this review, I just found it amusing. Yours has magic though, which the ...

But then, she wasn’t a scaredy shrimp. Boxing shrimp Tyson disagrees with you and would like to fight you irl over this statement. Having said that, this was pretty solid. ...

Hello friend Your decision to have this scene as dialogue is peculiar. Did you choose to do so for a reason? If so, I'm not getting it. You probably want ...

hi friend, Holofernes here to grant your request. I didn't read the note at the beginning. To me disclaimers feel like you're justifying your writing to someone, which is a ...

Hello friend, your premise is solid. I like sci-fi stories, and I think teen protagonists can be appealing to a vast audience. You've provided with enough information to make me ...

hello hello This flowed smoothly for the most part. It's not easy to pace a short story. The conclusion made me smile. It reminds me of Aesop's fables, without the ...

hi again. Time for me to give this a proper-ish review. You may or may not have picked up my subtle hints on how I adore you. This is the ...

hello hi I like emotional stories that turn out to have relevant meaning to what's going on in the present. We all do. This is a fine emotional story. I ...

Hello hi Overall I liked this a lot. There were some parts I especially enjoyed, like when Gray is sitting by himself on the cliff and the dialogue between him ...

hi again In answer to your second question, I don't think this is moving too fast. On the contrary, I almost wish something more had happened in this chapter. Not ...

hello hi you've introduced an interesting setting. I'm curious to not only discover more about Ava, but also these Rangers, and the mysterious disease on top of that. I can't ...