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Not exactly a new view on rejection. I don't know if I'd put this under poetry. Without line breaks, it might be classified as a prose poem, but if we ...

Remember, a haiku doesn't HAVE to be 5-7-5. You can play with the syllable count and line breaks if you want to; you'll find a lot more freedom in that. ...

It's kind of a discontinued grocery list sort of poem, except instead of potatoes and marshmallows, you're ordering angst. :P I don't know if I could possibly say it better ...

I like the opening line, but the rest sort of left a bad feeling in my head. The problem is that it's all rather simplistic. It's fine as a child's ...

I'm delighted that you can list a bunch of synonyms for "hope". But I don't think it makes poetry. It's awfully childish to write a poem entitled or including a ...

I saw that you've recently posted a lot of stuff--try not to post more than one thing a day. It drives people away from your work. I'm not sure what ...

It's generally frowned upon to put a poll up on your literary works; save it for the Lounge and usergroups. I was surprised that you used first person in this ...

I liked the beginning much better than I liked the end. The use of numbers made it much more whimsical and humorous (in a bitter sort of way) than the ...

Summer, it's generally encouraged that you only post one new piece per day on the YWS forums. Posting less than that is good too. If people see an explosion of ...

"injoy"? Please. As Snoink said, this doesn't seem like a poem. I would clarify; this isn't a sophisticated poem. It's just fine for children's verse or a picture book, but ...

I would reeeally love this poem to be, um, coherent? I don't want to sound really, really mean, but I think I'm about to. This is, as far as I ...

This is cute and funny, but I feel like I've read it before. See, there are a billion other poems out there JUST LIKE this one that express the same ...

This is a very interesting beginning. At first I was confused--I didn't know what you meant when you talked about her body taking in the electricity, and then I was ...

I have to say I'm not quite as impressed as Suzie. I find this a tired repetition of thousands of teenage naturey poems. The tone is breathy, listlike. The imagery...not ...

You have some lovely images here, but I feel as though they aren't connected well. I finished the poem and was sort of like..."Oh, that's nice. Where was it supposed ...