Published December 1, 2007
1.
Canvas of colors,
splashed across an ocean,
sunlight becomes black.
2.
Enormas titans,
carring the sky above,
watching those below.
3.
Pillows of white,
fluffy castles above us,
floating in the wind.
4.
A silver platter
glowing in the darkened sky,
night light of the earth.
5.
mirror of clear blue,
reflecting sunlight to all,
giving life to man.
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alright everyone! 1. is a sunset 2. are mountains 3. clouds 4. the moon 5. a lake
thanks!
I didn't know that haikus can be different thatn just 5-7-5 so thank you!
I know Haikus are suppost to be about nature! so thank you!
Lovely.
<3
I love it when i see someone with true understanding of haiku.
The understanding that they are suppose to be about nature and the earth.
There great
Remember, a haiku doesn't HAVE to be 5-7-5. You can play with the syllable count and line breaks if you want to; you'll find a lot more freedom in that.
Each haiku you have here is about a specific thing. I think that's perfectly find, and a good exercise in concise, original description. The problem is that they're all sentence fragments or loosely connected phrases. Work on writing in complete sentences (not a requirement, but a good idea).
-Colleen
You write poetry too? I'm so jealous!
I meant well.
Anyways, sorry for being so harsh in my latest reviews of your work.
That one is by far my favourite! It's awesome! There's just something about it!
Hmm...not sure how I feel about this one. It has no meaning.
Heehee, that one makes me feel amused. No idea why.
Second fave. I love the moon.
Hhhmm...kind of random, but I still like it.
Well, these were quite good. I really liked them.
Keep writing,
Ayra