Butterfinger

Don't apologize. I was a jerk. I should have listened to my inner reviewer instead of my demon angel. Give me a few mins and I'll give you a professional ...

HIGHWHITESOCKS! I really enjoyed your post. (hoping you're really not just a creepy guy, I'll take your word) I think I just let my personal beliefs get in the way ...

Tenyo! Thank you for your comments! It's nice to hear what you have to say! I appreciate it! Your questions help when thinking about how to further this. Dramallama: I ...

Ok, I'm not demanding anyone to do anything. I was simply trying to get some feedback, because otherwise it would just get passed by. I know this piece for sure ...

Wow, thanks for the comments so far. I don't see how this could make anyone want to set me on fire, but I guess some people just have anger issues. ...

I found this a little disturbing. Actually, a lot. I don't even know why I read it, or am commenting now, but it's just awkward. That's all I have to ...

Thanks! I changed a few lines. I think it sounds better.

Wow! I'm sooo happy for all your comments! I actually thought I was being smart when I spelled lite.....haha....I had a stupid blonde moment! (even though I'm not blonde!) I ...

I really love this poem! Beautiful wording and it flows perfectly! You paint an interesting picture! Keep writing!

perdido! Thanks for your comments! I love constructive criticisms! They always help! I don't know that words can be harsh and seductive and daring at the same time. Maybe pick ...

I love the rhythm, and the rhyme, it flows very smoothly and doesn't seem forced at all. It's the story of my life! Haha! Every one has to battle their ...

Come on people! 42 views and only 3 reviews!

Bahahaha! You defintley didn't hold back any emotion in this piece! I never took French, but some teachers are just that way. I like how you rhymed your lines and ...

Can't wait to hear this! Keep writing-you have a talent for it!

I'm no expert at haiku's, but they made sense to me! I share the same feelings about snow-yuck! The best part about winter is when it's over! Keep writing! -Butterfinger!