Butterfinger

I agree with sbitonti, great line! Keep working on it!

Hahaha :) I love your noodle ;) Great job!

Great start here! I like the idea of 'sprinkled sunlight.'

I have to say I love this. I love the length because with each line you create an image in my head and I have to keep reading to see ...

Wow. This actually gave me chills while reading. Not just because of the subject matter, but because of the word choice. Very powerful. Great job.

I know your mom will love it! Do we get to hear it?

You ought to think or you'd cease to be. Did you write this part or quote it?

I don't find this chessy at all. Very beautiful writing! Vey well structures and yOu kept up the flow so it didn't drag at all. I was engaged throughout the ...

Very interesting. Not sure how I feel about it. Great work!

Wow, that's really deep Ty! Brilliant wording that paints a colorful picture. I applaud you! I'm not the best at lyrics, but Awesome work!

Hmmmmm....... I find this interesting and disturbing at the same time. Brilliant to say the least- you sure have a way with words! Keep it up!

I love this!!!!! Simple- beautiful- brilliant!!!!

Wow!! This is positively brilliant!!!! I love every line! The picture made it even better. I can't wait to read more of your work! Never stop writing!

Love this! Very interesting!

Hi-ya! You've posted in the wrong category :^) great start!