Butterfinger

First off: Spelling Error: but failing to return you r fleeing soul to your brain. Next: I'd suggest some punctuation, but don't count on me to help with that :) ...

First off, I'd like to say that this poem is written wonderfully for those who like nature scenes. It really is Brilliant! For me though, I guess, I like more ...

First off, Welcome! Welcome!!! Secondly, I have to say that you're going to get very diverse reviews on here. Some will attack your grammar, others punctuation, others the whole being ...

Ok, first off, I didn't read the previous comments because it just becomes a reviewers battle field of disagreements. Here's what I thought of your piece: Yes, Rhyming can be ...

Hi-ya! I'm no good at longer reviews, but it was a bit difficult for me to get into this because there is so much dialogue. The characters don't have to ...

I love the whole idea of this piece. The ghost that has seem all. It just seemed to me that as a reader, I was bored by the forced rhyming ...

Lost my place, gazing in your face. I would suggest breaking this in half on another line. And the deeper I fall the darker my desires Fell to fall in ...

I mean that coming out and being proud that you 'tear people apart' isn't necessarily a good thing. This is an interesting line, but it's like you relish in breaking ...

Hey there! I usually don't review longer pieces, but this one really hooked me, and I couldn't stop reading! Just like the first person, I'll give it a line by ...

Hey there! I like the creativity of this piece, interesting topic! The only urk I have with this is this line: Has been is will be It just doesn't seem ...

This poem intrigues me. You say you don't like it, but it's absolutely brilliant! Short and simple, descriptive with a great attention grabber. This reads like it could keep going ...

Hey! Hey! This is a lovely piece! Even with out blood & guts this piece has so much emotion in it that it speaks for itself! You most certainly have ...

Hey! At first I just skimmed this, but then I took it one line at a time, really reading it, and a cool thing happened. I read amazing passages with ...

Hey there! Your title caught my attention right off the bat, but when I started to read, it just didn't flow right for me. Don't get me wrong, this is ...

Wow! I'm not great with reviewing short stories, but this is great! You have an interesting way with words and the image you make captures the reader! I love how ...