Published May 30, 2011
Short but sweet.
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I like that it was straight to the point. Short but really good and its true words are our biggest weapon.
Hmmm....After I re-read it, I can sort of seem what you mean...I guess...
This line kinda explains that.
My dagger isn’t sharp at all;
My gun doesn’t even shoot., comma instead These lines are very clever, they hook you right form the beginning.
Yet I am vicious. perhaps an exclamation point instead? If not, reword the line so it has more of an impact
I can tear people apart., comma instead
I can destroy them.
I can make people’s souls dangle
From a rope that's slowly breaking. These liens seem a bit lack-luster
My weapon is invisible., comma instead
My weapon is indestructible.
I can never get away
from it.dash mark -My weapon is, comma
Words.
Nice piece :]
-KatTrain
Nonononono NO WAY. You read it wrong. I was admitting that I've done it.
I mean that coming out and being proud that you 'tear people apart' isn't necessarily a good thing.
This is an interesting line, but it's like you relish in breaking people down.
This poem sounds like your proud to be seen as arrogant, jerkish and vicious.
It's just not my kind of writing. No offense intended!
^What?
Ummm....That's not really a good thing. Blunt but I didn't feel anything.
Blunt, short and simple. To the point, concise. Blah, blah, blah. Hell, I liked it. It was easy to read and entertaining. There is a lot of truth in your words, the pen is mightier than the sword it seems, and I agree. Great flow, great wording, great idea. 9/10 Good Job! Keep Writing!