Busheldood

It's an interesting poem, certainly capturing the writer in the moment. I don't know if you wanted it to be a blank poem (non rhythmic) or with rhymes because i ...

Hiya! I liked your sentence structure and descriptive sense as halogirl4197 states. The topic seemed specifically chosen and a delicate one to write about: You did that very well, i ...

It was good and xoCairo was right, you do have potential. The story had a good plot, but not a lot of description. It sounded as if you had wanted ...

It was nice but I think you could do better ;). If you had put in a bit more description and punctuation it would help the reader get pulled into ...

Wow, I really liked this one. (I don't know why but the first paragraph seemed to rhyme). The story had a meaning and lesson to it, and also a truth ...

wow, it was a smooth, descriptive, poem and was outside the usual style people chose for this topic. But I have to agree with kcglitter there, you couldn've have put ...

Wow, it was a beautiful story. The way it didn't give too much away as it improved was very good. I like your descriptive style of writing and the way ...

wow, i really liked it. It was really imaginative and full of emotion this 'change' has caused. I liked the way it made you feel like you were lifted and ...

wow, i liked it. Sort of like the end of a fairy tale with the knight in shining armour's different ending. I liked the choice of vocabulary there and the ...

wow, i really liked it. Especially the way you repeated the same first part on each line and the way you made it into a short story of running away ...

wow, I really liked it. It held so much truth and honesty. I really like your style of writing, and the topic was chosen well. I just want to say ...

wow, I normally don't read poems without paragraphs (i find them too confusing), but I really liked this. It gave a story and reason, and emotion of help the reader ...

haha, I found it really funny, yet true. I too will never understand why parents don't understand why teens have sudden mood swings (and what they were feeling at the ...

wow, i really liked your description. And the emotion in it filled me with sadness knowing that this does still happen. Good topic to talka botu to open eyes and ...

I liked it, it showed how the rose could be the most beautiful flower, yet cause pain. If you'd have put in a bit more expression in it, it'd really ...