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Re: Would you like an apple pie with that?
Hey! This is interesting. Like, my family eats at MD's alot because its cheap, you know? But it's obviously very unhealthy. I like how you pointed that out. I like ...
Mar 19, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 1: The Mouse
Hey! I just wanted to tell you how much I love this: ( A soft sigh escaped pale, pink parted lips as a young girl no more than 16 sat ...
Mar 14, 2014 -
Re: Cut your Cake
Hey, I really like your poem! It's fantastic. Pompadour is absolutely right. It's short, but it gets your attention right away, with only a few words. but I figured all ...
Feb 27, 2014 -
Re: Strong too long
Hey, I like this. the poem is nice, and makes sense too me until this part; " But yet you still don’t see, not will you ever see." > It ...
Feb 26, 2014 -
Re: The Battlefield
Hey, nice to meet you & review your work! >> "I never meant to start the war Never meant for it to go so far Because honestly, I just wanted ...
Feb 24, 2014 -
Re: Before A Giant I Stand
This is a fantastic poem! I absolutely loved it. I'm a Christian myself, so this really speaks to me. God can be a little scary, I mean, this guy died ...
Feb 21, 2014 -
Re: Tropical Storm
Honestly, I don't see anything wrong, or doesn't fit this piece. It's really, really, really good. It combines two of my favorite things; Coffee & Love. Things that can break ...
Feb 19, 2014 -
Re: Blood Lies & Alibis
This stories sad & good. Good details & emotion. Claire and I had been best friends since we started grade school. She was the only person I trusted with my ...
Feb 19, 2014 -
Re: Paper Airplanes
Hey, Nice poem/lyric. I like this part; But did you see me as I am? I can't believe we reached the end, oh can you feel it? These memories in ...
Feb 19, 2014 -
Re: Time
Nice poem! I like how it really fits with the world and how life stops for no one. Theres no control with time If you want time Value it It's ...
Feb 19, 2014 -
Re: Mosaic of life.
I really like this poem. It's simple, but has alot of meaning behind it. Encased by extraordinary episodes like fairy-land’s fantastical fiction < I like the fairy-land's part in the ...
Feb 19, 2014 -
Re: One More Day
Morbid, but nice setting and details. The sniper let out a frustrated breath as he powered down his rifle, both enemies still locked dead in his scope. Still breathing. Still ...
Feb 18, 2014 -
Re: The Soul Collector
This was a long, well thought out piece of work. Fantastic details. It seems like you thought through this really well. In the education system, they cover mathematics, physics, and ...
Feb 17, 2014 -
Re: Death is Emphasis
I love it, love it, love it. It is dark, but it has real truth in it too. Not many people can put death so completely in a story/poem. But ...
Feb 17, 2014 -
Re: Thank God for Today
I love this poem also, because i'm a Christian and it speaks really loudly to me. Seeing the bright autumn leaves, Swinging through the summer trees. Thank God for today, ...
Feb 17, 2014
