Boolovesyou

Unavailable is a beautiful word I am Unavailable If you move this to the end of this stanza, the poem would have more of a form. Right now it has ...

Okay this is how I'm going to do this a weird way. There are lines I just really don't like, not a lot but some. I will make them red. ...

I’m standing here looking down To an endless eternity The laughter in my ears Screaming so loud That I can’t stand anymore of it Anymore? When you say anymore it ...

The poem, while a good idea, lacks emotions. The last stanza is only part I could see emotion, and very little at that. While brilliant its bland. This mind thinks ...

Hey! I love the poem, except as it goes further in the rhyme stops or gets ... bad. First stanza - amazing and they aren't all bad. I love the ...

Blind: adjective unable to see; sightless. most people who are blind have no vision and while yours is 20:20, you look but you don't see. How could you miss the ...

Silence Fills my room. Confusion You must assume. Regret Reminds me of the past. Doubt That this won’t last. Haunt Is what it is. Forget Is what it needs. My ...

Its good, I'm just going to point out some spelling errors. But she is a sacred tresure , An endangered flower Who is never to be mesured Nor even devourd ...

If these are suppose to be lyrics, you need a chorus. I'm going to look at it as a poem. It’s everything I knew, Everything but you. This part of ...

Hey! Okay, so let me start off by saying, you are a really good writer. Your descriptive with a hint of mysterious, the kind of things that keep people reading. ...

Hello! I'll read this poem and automatically thought it was great. It was fluent and spot on rhyming. When you grow up and fledge your wings Fledged is a bit ...

You have amazing rhyming here. I mean you have it spot on. I love the poem, and I have tried writing a poem like this before. Its awesome! I have ...

Hey! First I would like to point out you need punctuation. Its hard to understand with out it. I also think you should get rid "you're" and actually right you ...

Alright =D I liked the poem. I am, at the moment, in french one so this taught me a lot. However, to review the poem I took out the french ...

Hey! Great story! Only a few nit picks. Cigarette smoke wafts through the air, mixing with the scent of woodstove and weed. It reminds me when we first entered the ...