Young Writers Society

Hello Boolovesyou Here! ( let's pretend I don't know you like you are related to me ) First off for grammar My breathing's getting faster, I’m completely a disaster. [ ...

An angel now sings to me sweet sweetly? Eather works though. telling me, to just breathe. I love this stanza so much. It made me catch my breath. Nicely done! ...

Hey SC, First you aren't clear on what you are talking about. Two these are lyrics, and go in the lyric section, and three you have some mistakes. Blood of ...

Hey AlyKat! I really only have a few suggestions. I don't really feel like you have a whole poem here. Maybe an outline for one... Alright you need to try ...

When I think back to that horrible day September. no period 11,2001 period I don't remember much, but I know many lives were lost period It was a beautiful day, ...

Hello WrittenInStone! Alright! To start nice piece you have here! You have some really nice, flowing line here. It's exciting! My only suggestion is use personal pronouns! I feel like ...

I can see each passing second. The long comma black hands are pointing fingers, I can hear each passing second, it's a slow comma steady beat. pointing out how we ...

Oh Hey Booboo! Boo here. Alright WELL. Thin is a bit of a problem to review here. You need to realize that puncuation is an extremely important part of english, ...

Hey Urban! Here as requested. I only found a few mistakes, but I do have a suggestion. Although while you have a wonderful vocabulary in some places I feel like ...

Hey Thestorygirl, First off one spelling mistake. Then the screams began; first high and peircing, Also I think this should be a semicolon. disbelieving. piercing Then gravity brought it all ...

Boo here! Hey Sara, I actually wasn't super happy about this story. First off felt more like a poem. It was repetitive and melodramatic. Scars don't bleed. Perhaps talk about ...

Hey Pyro! I really enjoyed this. A lot better then cutter's poems I could write! You did a very good job! And tell me of Calm Death's fair trade. Fair? ...

Hey Sakura, I really liked this poem. Nicely written. I can tell you have some experience by it. Good job! Few issues: I turn away, wounded, I cannot bear bare ...

Hey Kaf, You really REALLY need to work on grammar. Watch those run on sentences. As far as context it was nicely written. Some parts have to much descriptions. C ...

Hey Wish, My only real problem with this is GRAMMAR! You need it desperately. I think I got what you're trying to say, but I'm not sure. As for context ...