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Thanks Sam :D He is staying at Ann's house...you might want to read the story again :wink: He is out of that regiment for ever (unless he goes to another ...

Thanks, Sam :D Ok, I'll get rid of the shawl Hmm...I'll have to re-think the soldiers lines, lol

Thanks Sam :) The soldier is the young man who Emily met in the prologue :wink:

The one thing I noticed- wait, what just happened? 1. Why would they care about warehouses? I didn't know that they had some sort of business going. Emily tells the ...

Lol, this was great!!! :D Very sweet..... :wink:

I think you need a rating on this :wink: Interesting.... ^_^

just deleted them :roll: It didn't like Girl job search games chat rump queen and others.... :?

Thanks for that, Emma and Jojo! Yeah, I can see your point with those sentances, Emma...thanks, I'll fix them up :D P.S. The dots were because my computer didn't like ...

Lol, this was good! At first I thought it would be a bit more serious, but I was smiling by the end :D

Cliche....! ^_^ It was good, but I've just read so many like it.....

I like this. The rhyming was good, and not forced. Great job! :D

lol, I guess its so he doesn't have anything restricting his arms when he's whipping... :? good point though, Sam

The large wooden door creaked as it slowly opened. The white candles from the hall illuminated the small room and the silluethe of a large man in robes appeared. Do ...

Thanks for the comments :) I thought I'd mentioned a friend in about the second chapter...but I'll go see if I can establish one

Thanks Niobe and Amice. I fixed up the gramma errors.... I'll try to make the next chapters better :D