Boni_Bee

Wow, I thought this was great!!! I like the simple, concise way you set it out, and I like the 'I'm full of rage. Completely calm' part, because I know ...

As Nanli looked over the west wall she squinted her eyes in the poor light to see the Black Mountain, a thin misty fog clung around the city and torches ...

Winter ice on your unsheathed knife frozen and frozen tears newly spilt, so young and brittle, against my shoulder you whispered lies where once hope rose in cold eyes, spring ...

10am Emily had vowed to get the class as a whole, she had survived the holidays living off the idea that soon she would strip an entire class of their ...

Interesting :D The third stanza I had to read a couple of times for it to fit in, but apart from that I really like the idea. Good job! :wink:

Out comes my father dresssed in grey. Waves good bye and drives away. I think 'he waves goodbye' would be better Thoughts run wild is he . Need a , ...

My Road I think the title needs some work. As you say in the poem, its not just your road, and many others follow the same one, so something more ...

This was very nice :) The only thing I didn't like was how you had 'suprise' in the middle of the first stanza, and it didn't rhyme, but the other ...

Hmmm....interesting. I'm glad Tom is getting to know some people, although it sort of rushed at the end, but it was good :D I like the open and care free ...

Very nice!!! I found this very intriguing, and you did a good job with the descriptions (even if they were a bit flowery), but I enjoyed this. I can sort ...

Wow, that was awesome!!!! It had me glued to the story till the end!!! Very facinating. There was a couple of spelling mistakes, but apart from that I can't find ...

Heartbeat, running Fleeing from a fear I Cannot see This is good, but are you talking about running mentally from something, or actually running? Silence which sears my Terrified soul ...

Memories abound In every crevice and under every rock In the trickle of the water and the setting of the sun, Very nice! This October twilight I think I would ...

lol, that is funny!!! :lol: very cute, and yes, that 'obese blob of scales' is hilarious!!! :D good job

Stella stood her face red and moist from the many tears that trickled down her face. The man before her was covered to the chin in a white embroidered cloth ...