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Re: Wolf and Aristocrat: Chapter Two
Hey hey hey! I'm back for more of this amazing tale with wonderful potential. Grammar N' Stuff There was a table, and sat at it was a girl. So, this ...
Apr 10, 2016 -
Re: Starlight: Chapter 1 (Part II)
Hello there! I've come to review your story, as per your request. Grammar N' Stuff answered Shayla who had a twinkle in her eyes. So, this is good, you describing ...
Apr 9, 2016 -
Re: Starlight: Chapter 1 (Part I)
Hello there! I have come to review your work, as requested. Sorry it took so long--I've been ill, but I'm here now! Grammar N' Stuff She was attractive, well to ...
Apr 8, 2016 -
Re: Bang
Huh. Well, that wasn't dark at all. *Obvious sarcasm is obvious* So, I saw that you said that this could use some improvement--but I feel that this is just fine ...
Apr 8, 2016 -
Re: Wolf and Aristocrat: Chapter One
Hey, Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! So, first off-great opening line! I really hate it when somebody starts off their book with "once upon a time. . ." "I ...
Apr 8, 2016 -
Re: Heartbeat Academy: Chapter 37 [1/2]
Hey, Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! First off--*Takes deep breath* *In an octave higher than my usual voice* PLOOOOOOOOT TWIST! Second thing: I haven't read anything prior to this ...
Apr 3, 2016 -
Re: Dissonance «1»
Hey, Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! Quick note before I get to my review--I'm writing this on a tablet with a squirley keyboard, so I apologize if I make ...
Mar 31, 2016 -
Re: The Heart of a Warrior ch. 1
Hey, Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! Interesting story! I'd love to read more. I love your descriptions and your characters, along with all your settings! I just have a ...
Mar 3, 2016 -
Re: The Secret Daughter
Hey, Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! so, this is an interesting story. Reminds me of a mixture of a novella that my favorite author wrote called "The Emperor's Soul" ...
Mar 2, 2016 -
Re: Demi of Terra: Chapter 1
Hey there! Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! I like your story! Hope to read more. Just a couple things: Suggestions: Despite spending my nights here occasionally, I didn’t like ...
Mar 2, 2016 -
Re: Caged
Hey, Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! Well, that was interesting. A good story indeed! Great grammar, too. I felt that there were a few sentences that could use some ...
Mar 2, 2016 -
Re: The Living Abyss - Chapter 2: The Asshen Folk
Hey, Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! This is really cool. I really love your hook on the first paragraph. So, I haven't really spotted any errors per se, but ...
Feb 28, 2016 -
Re: Thorns of Destiny - Chapter Four
Hey, Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! Great job! I love Thorns of Destiny. It's a good book with lots of promise! There are only a couple notable mistakes in ...
Feb 28, 2016 -
Re: El Salsa Diablo
Hey! Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! So, even though this could have a different format and better grammar, I was still very amused by it! So, I wanna help ...
Feb 28, 2016 -
Re: Drisilia in the Mara
Hello there! Jay here, your friendly neighborhood critic! So, this is really good! But I have a slight problem with the flow. In the beginning, I was fine with the ...
Feb 28, 2016