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Right, so I disagree with some of what willachilles and ThePhoenix said. I can obviously tell this is not a fast food place like McDonald's. I was brought back to ...

So this is a little late but I'm going to review your stuff now :D Alright, so I agree with NafaKitty and jumpingsheep. This was really well written and descriptive, ...

Me again :) A couple of grammatical errors I noticed: You repeat "despise" in paragraphs 2 and 3. Her rattled nerves settled as the large man returned her embrace with ...

Oh, poor cub =( I hope things change for the beastlings! Now I'm getting REALLY SUPER curious about what the heck is going on with the beastlings. who is this ...

Hello! Hawk here for a review :) Let me start with the nitpicky stuff (there wasn't a whole lot.) I agree with Blues about the quotation after togeth- , it ...

I agree with Cody, the formatting was a bit strange to me. With a bit of tuning I think it could work though :) (Also, I like the title as ...

Blackhawk reporting for duty! Okay, let me just say: your story is AMAZING! Your character development and use of the supernatural is fantastic! I love everything about this piece! It's ...

Hello, Hawk here for a review! Alright, so I have two main things I want to say, that are sort of one thing in the long run: character/plot development and ...

Me again :) Question: is the first paragraph meant to be mocking the "great laws" that were written? Your use of the word "pretentiously" almost makes me think so. If ...

Let me just start by saying that I completely disagree with everything that RacheDrache said. The "blubber" as she calls it, I feel like complements the story. Without it, reading ...

Hey there, Hawk again :) So, I love the way your story is developing. Everything everyone else has said seems right on, except for the comment that Kastia isn't a ...

So I meant to give you some advice on this piece, but FromWithin basically covered it all! I love romance stories, and this one was fantastic by far. This is ...

Hi, Hawk here to lend some friendly advice :) So, the first section needs to be split up into paragraphs. It's very very long. Also, the first few opening sentences ...

Hey :) Hawk here to give you a review. First off, this was super captivating. Though I'm still pretty completely and utterly lost at what's going on, it's alright because ...

Hey there :) So I didn't read the first four chapters, but despite that I still enjoyed the story. The title intrigued me, and though not a lot happens in ...