BigBadBear

Alizz, This was a pretty good start. It’s been done to death though. I’m not really one to read all of this angsty teen things. As long as this steers ...

I couldn't critique the first one, because I'm lame and did want to spend a whole critique telling you how cool it was. So I'm here on the second one. ...

Huh. I'm not quite sure what to think of this. I tried entering Jabb's contest, but utterly failed. I couldn't do it, so bravo for entering. I understood the first ...

Er... yes. I'm going through your Oddities in your portfolio, because they are just too good. I disagree with Snoink. I love this story, because it's so... innocent, I guess. ...

Wow. Do you always write so awesomely? I hope that's a word. There really isn't much to say. Grammar was spot on, and that's usually what I'm best at finding. ...

I am not, in any way, resurrecting this. I just wanted to leave my two cents. I think the cool part about this story, is that you can take it ...

Manties, Oh, my gosh, that was freaking better than I could ever have predicted! I was glued to the screen the entire time! This was so fantastically awesome, I can’t ...

What are you guys talking about? This made perfect sense, in every sense of the word. Duh. You guys are lame. Must I break this down paragraph by paragraph?! Jerome ...

Er... Um... >.> ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. Your story was very interesting. It was a lot of fun to read, and very mysterious. We are left wondering ...

Hey, Demeter! What's up? Before I begin, I have to tell you that I haven't been especially great with critiquing poems, so this might be full of praises. But hey, ...

Seaweed, Holy freak, that was long! That took forever to read! Next time, post a little bit shorter. If you have to, you can make a couple threads for the ...

Aliam Remard, No. No, no, no, no, no. I did not like this chapter at all. Ugh. Where do I start? First, this was highly unrealistic. The dialog wasn’t right, ...

This was really good. Direct and to the point. I'm going to find all of the errors right now, for you. :) If crippled or deformed [comma] the dancer has ...

Aliam Remard, This was an amazing chapter. Not that it surprised me or anything that you could write such a great story. It’s really getting good. I cannot wait for ...