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Re: Black Stone Inn (working title)
Hi, ButterFlyInk, here's your review as requested. The moon was sheltered by thick misty clouds, which threatened a thunderstorm. Not a good idea to start the story off with passive ...
Jul 23, 2009 -
Re: Mutts - Shapes
I feel terrible about this, but... This was just so good, I couldn't find anything to really critique. What I really love about these stories is that they're all so ...
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Mutts - Passing
A few little things first-- Marcie turned to the screen next to her desk. One of her stiletto heels tapped against the makeup artist’s arm and Marcie pulled back as ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Maiko of Gion
Hello, foxfire, I'll be your reviewer for today. Be warned that I do get very nitpicky and will point out things that bother me even if I don't have any ...
Jul 16, 2009 -
Re: .
Here goes the nitpick machine. ^^ *cough trying to distract myself from writers block cough* Merlin lifted his head and stared at the sight before him "Stared" doesn't seem right ...
Jul 13, 2009 -
Re: .
Here's my review. :) It'll be a little less nitpicky than the previous one because I think I took care of most of the nitpicks there. As soon as I ...
Jun 21, 2009 -
Re: Carouselia
Hi, Conrad, I'll be your reviewer for today. Prepare for a lot of nitpicking! The twisted shapes of the wooden animals looked different beneath the moonlight. Maybe it's just me, ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: Change chapter 1 (yes... again)
Hi minimac, I'll be your reviewer for today. Prepare for lots of nitpicking.... :D The white gates in front of Maeve stood menacingly, supposedly inviting her in. Ack, you're using ...
Jun 16, 2009 -
Re: When the Sky Cries
I'll be your reviewer for today. Be warned I can get rather...nitpicky... I'm not intending to be harsh, though; just trying to help you be the best writer you can ...
Jun 12, 2009 -
Re: Meriadossa [2AB - full chapter]
It's me again, back with more nitpicking. :) Promise I won't be too harsh, though. The summons from the Kalagat came in the middle of the morning, sun peeking from ...
Jun 11, 2009 -
Re: Meriadossa [1]
Hi Esme, I'm going to be reviewing this. :) Be warned I do get rather...nitpicky...and I'm feeling incredibly tired this morning, which is not helping my mood, but I promise ...
Jun 11, 2009 -
Re: Magius Trilogy - The Black Emerald
Hi, blackpencil, I'll be your reviewer for today. Be warned that I get very nitpicky with my reviews; I'm not being harsh, just trying to help you produce the best ...
Jun 7, 2009 -
Re: Chasing Shadows; Ch. 1
Hello, I'll be your reviewer for today. :) Be warned, I'm rather...nitpicky. The soft melody of the music box echoed and faded through the dimly lit room. "Echoed" and "faded" ...
May 31, 2009 -
Re: Ender's Game
In junior high, I read Ender's Game and loved it. Several years later, I went back to the book and realized it wasn't half as good as I thought it ...
May 23, 2009 -
Re: Fire, After
I'll be your reviewer for today. :) Mountains will blind in the heat of centuries. Oceans will chaos with the blood of the earth. I think there should be a ...
May 22, 2009
