Benway

I enjoyed this piece--direct, confessional, but stylistic. It doesn't come off as simply another repetition of the familiar theme of going one's own way. The spirit of individualism here is ...

I think this stands to be a rather poignantly short and insightful piece--philosophical, surreal, even political. Such short, dense pieces rely heavily on their context, and when they're postings in ...

I've always found it problematic to technically criticize what I consider to be poetry for spoken word/slam. I never got any feeling of rhyme or meter here, and based on ...

Very interesting. I'm kind of a sucker for interesting pagination and a sympathetic turns toward the victims of the Father's strange ego. I hope to see where this develops, how ...

I really don't read a lot of tribute poetry, but certainly a fine example of a man expected to be more than a man--an office, a crown--hindered by handicapped but ...

A good, tight confessional piece. No digressions, just the hard line of an honest telling of oppression and endurance. I like how this flows. Not musical or terribly stylized, I ...

I can't find much to pick at here, and I'm not inclined to. A beautifully-felt piece, not too heavy on the soul nor too light on the imagination. My only ...

Evocative and honest piece--a feeling of emotional tumult and recovery of self we probably all know. I have no issues reading through, style-wise, but I find myself confused on the ...

Aside from the lack of poetic music, which isn't so much an issue as a stylistic gripe of mine, I found the narrative picture you are building here to be ...

I happen to know exactly where you're coming from, but even so, I can rate this poem as a well constructed piece of free verse rich with evocative detail and ...

This reminds me of a lot of the Slam stuff I've read/heard over the years. A lot of Slam is rant--and this is a rant. And maybe that's all slam ...

That's a rather moribund depiction of art, and an interesting one. I have often thought of artistic creation as a sort of Gnostic thing--the radical introduction of a thing half-you, ...

I would like a better understanding of who the speaker is. You say that they are immortal. As Immortal is the title, I'm assuming that immortality is a primary center ...

This is pretty bloody great. Powerful, sensual imagery and a good scattering of some of the more obscure vocab (churlish). I have no modification to suggest other than a passing ...

Well written, with good imagery and great creepy effect. Darkly sexy, even--if you're into that sort of thing. As for me, I just enjoyed the grim flirtation of the thing--very ...