Benrobertringrose

This is an impressive start. I agree with previous reviews, however. Excessive descriptions in places and overuse of adjectives. Make efforts to keep your work as concise as possible. Go ...

Whilst this story holds real potential, I feel its delivery could have been smoother in places. You ‘tell’ us an awful lot, for instance. ‘The coach came into view and ...

First sentences are extremely important. I have to say, I didn’t like yours. Words like Disintegrating and Rotten - I know you are trying to convey a message, but reading ...

You provide an interesting opening. I also like the lengths of your sentences; they are concise whilst maintaining good rhythm. We are immediately able to imagine the scene; for me, ...

Hello! First off, I have to admit that a strong prologue is my guilty pleasure. Of late, I’ve feared us prologue enthusiasts are a dying breed, seeming as so many ...

Hello there, First and foremost this story is instantly engaging, the second I finished the first sentence I was well and truly hooked. I congratulate you on that, because as ...

Hello there, Evidently you are a writer with the unique capability to make the reader feel something genuine, whilst reading this I was able to relate to the character with ...

Before I review this I would first like to share my thoughts on an appealing beginning to a story. I often feel that the most effective way to engage the ...

I must urge you to continue with this, because this start is very impressive. Your descriptions and writing style is very unique and in many ways original. You write in ...

Hello, Overviews on the slight mistakes have been dealt with; I’m poor at that anyway so that’s a relief. So I'll focus on aspects such as my overall impression of ...

Hello there, So basically, a while back, you gave me a top review and some insightful feedback. I really appreciated that and have since been planning to give you a ...

Hello, The first thing for me personally that was evident was your impressive writing style! This is really well written; you illustrate the scene’s beautifully with your descriptions. I have ...

Wow, very thought provoking! It’s insightful in a peculiar sort of way; I mean this as a compliment. Certainly a unique topic, the way you deliver it is very effective. ...

Hello A very impressive piece. Certainly had me hooked. You use the fact that the main character is being bullied to create sympathy and as a result us the readers ...

Hello Ahmad, this is very impressive. Particular strength for me personally is simply the idea. A very new, innovative idea! In the first couple of sentences you instantly illustrate the ...