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  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Why I Write

    You make some points here that I would definitely agree with, especially your main point that to write you need to have read or are reading. Although I would argue ...

    Feb 12, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Power of Pop Secret

    Hey there, I tell you what I love about you're story: it feels real. I find myself trying to critique, but I'm having second thoughts. When I read this, there's ...

    Jan 7, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Starlight

    Hey there, - as requested - So I really liked this poem because of the visualisations, the structure and the fluency. Usually I'd punctually rip poetry a part, but you're ...

    Jan 7, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Into the Depths. 1

    Hey there Elinor! Here as requested. Review: However , as she lay there, she found herself not being able to drift back into sleep. This feels a little too formal ...

    Jan 7, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Love I (Decay)

    Hey there. Just being a little picky, but this line could do with an extra syllable: to the days when we would whisper in the decaying light Perhaps alter the ...

    Jan 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: How Can I Forget?

    Hey there, The reviewers above me are right about repetition. The structure of this poem merely feels like you've taken a question, decided you're going to ask the same thing, ...

    Jan 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Tragedia Fatum

    Hey there, I must say that I liked this poem. There is a pretty good balance in terms of punctuation so there's no forced, choppy pace and nor is there ...

    Jan 4, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: 101 Things I Want to Do before I Die

    72. Visit England . . . 73. . . . and France . . . 74. . . . and Italy . . . 75. . . . and Ireland ...

    Jan 4, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: First Chance, Second String

    Hullo there! My first thoughts of this piece is that this is definitely one of those influential tales that are invaluable to stumble across. I don't play American football myself, ...

    Jan 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Deleted 6

    Hey there! Right, firstly, this is quite good in terms of narrative winds and snaps of visualisation thanks to a dandy set of word choicing. However, at the start, the ...

    Jan 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Clumsy

    Fimbling fingers turning sideways in their clumsy confusion- handholding really wasn’t so difficult, but I knew that you were flustered-blustered, red-faced and cute with embarrassed words , words,

    Jan 3, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Eternal Kiss

    Hi there Emmy, I have to say before we start that you have a real talent for imagery and word choice. This is one of those poems that is a ...

    Jan 3, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Wisdom (World View)

    Hi there, here as you requested. Just a few nitpicks to get started: shouting to from him inside the hollow I believe you meant to write: "shouting to him from ...

    Jan 3, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Denial

    Hey there! I have to say, as a Beatles fan, that this story interested me from the word go. It's short and you create a good character base and develop ...

    Jan 1, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Just life

    Hey there. First thing I thought when I read this piece was that it started off quite well. You had the subtle descriptions and the senses of overwhelming beauty portrayed ...

    Jan 1, 2011


The only fool bigger than the person who knows it all is the person who argues with him.
— Stanislaw Jerszy Lec