BenFranks

Hey there Sam, I liked this poem quite a lot actually, which - I'm sorry to say - surprised me a little because I was a little bit thrown at ...

Hey there! Those Eyes Firstly, this line didn't fit into the poem really: Oozing blood relentlessly I think it lacked affect, relevance and imagery, so you may want to rethink ...

Hey fixed! This was one of those poems where I click on it to review it and end up just being drawn into a pool of the author's mind, crafting ...

Hey there! Unlike Matt mentioned, your first stanza - in my opinion - was beautifully original; and I mean this in a rhythmic sense. It was so enticing! I absolutely ...

Hey there! Unfortunately, I found this poem a little uncomforting to be reading because you're lines are so short ~ which isn't necessarily a bad thing ~ but here it ...

Hey there! Okay, Matt's covered everything exactly as I would've nitpicked it, I definately second him with the grammar changes being this: Little girl, with your quiet, weeping eyes, Don't ...

Okay, Hi there! The non-fiction side of writing is something that I'm very passionate about and I admire it when people argue about world events. The problem that comes across ...

Hey there! The message and recollections of home you portray in this poetry are top notch, which shows that your writing and basic structure is pretty good. So I'll say ...

Hey there! What a lovely and gripping way to start! In cold blood We saw them coming, two socials across the park. Intent on vengeance, their mouths spew poisonous accusation's ...

Hello Gabriel! Ben here, I'll give you a little jot down of what I think of your piece, in *hmm* red italics I think, haven't used red in a while... ...

Hey there, Erm, first thoughts? Brilliant message! The imagery is obviously simplistic but it works really well, so your conveying the message to full affect. I especially liked the involvement ...

Hey there, This was an interesting poem and somewhat emotional as shown by your choices in language. Excusing the odd typo, there is something that I don't really find I ...

Hey Halycon! My favourite thing about this poem is your admirable use of varying line length. It makes the rhythm very quite individual in a sense and also helps me ...

Hey BigM, I think your problem here is structuring the poetry, because the rhythm I interpret and the images you portray are very well written. What you should do, like ...

Hi there, I enjoyed the beginning to this story and happen to admire small little tales such as these, however you need to be careful that although they're true , ...