BenFranks

Hey there Shubhi! Most people have pointed out the nitpicks, so I won't bother you with any dull repetition, what I will say though, concerns your dialogue. At the start ...

Hi there! I have to agree with fiction that the "it" seems to be a little repetitive and I share his confusion a little as to trying to understand what ...

Hey there! So, erm, most of the nitpicking has been done already and I'm sure what they've suggested will help you alot. However, my feedback for you is on the ...

Okay, so the title is obviously quite explicit since you've laid this out with an ingredients bit at the start which kind of doubles up as an introduction, but as ...

Hi there. Imagery and perhaps content wise this is interesting, but it's only really interesting if the reader's intrigued. I think the subject, author's note and opening paragraph develops the ...

Hullo Minister! This is a good piece :)! I'm taken in by your arguments, but more in a persuasive way than your "Success pieces". By this I mean I feel ...

Hey there Nike! I like how you've written this in a way that you've managed to open the topic up to debate. This shows that your writing causes thought provoking ...

Hey there Just Dance! This is a very nasty, sombre kind of lifestyle and I hope you feel better soon. Anyway, in terms of writing, I like how you've constructed ...

Hello there Nike, Okay, my first point is you should never full-caps a word, so make HUGE huge. Also, the sentence following your opening one, where you say you're currently ...

Hey Aspiring! This was beautiful to read! I really enjoyed the scenese you created like Durrie did. I see your books/pieces in a very cinematic sense, which can be good ...

Hey there, As much as I admire the reasons why you've written this poetry, I find myself agreeing with almost everything said by smorgishborg . I think that the way ...

Very good poetry indeed! My favourite thing has to be how you craft the problems she has through her actions on the swings and leave us with a frankly insane ...

Hey there Matt! Okay, I love the first line, it's enticing and a start that gives me high expectations and I think that's why the next two lines stood out ...

Hey there! This is good content wise as you've portrayed a thought provoking message and the experiences that vibe from it are very connected to people's morales so in that ...

Hi there, I'm going to give it to you honestly and this is how it is. For me, this piece is extremely lacking in clarity. Yeah sure, you're telling us ...