BehindtheMask

I adore this poem. It begins dark and gloomy, and then gradually becomes sweet and hopeful. On fire and bright, Doesn't really make sense. I know it's supposed to be ...

Hi Ebony. Reading this poem, all I get is an immense wave of self pity and it's way too strong. I agree wholeheartedly with Perse and Snoink. It is very ...

Hi :D I admire the emotion you portray in this poem. It may not be very well written, but I can definitely relate to the emotion in this, so you ...

Hey Aliaaryn :D I really admire what you're trying to get across here, but you're just not quite there yet. Reading this poem, I feel no emotion but gut-wrenching annoyance ...

Hey Smylin! Well, this has certainly sparked my interest. I'm intrigued to find out what exactly is this boys story. What's special about him? Why write a story about him? ...

Hi Cassandra! You looked to me for inspiration , And sadly, you found none . You flourished in my resignation , Not knowing you were my son . ^ This ...

Hi Angel. I think sarebear covered pretty much everything as far as nitpicks, so I'll leave you with this: I was drawn in immediately by the first stanza, but in ...

Hi Micki! Wow, I really liked this! I think for a story so short the concept is beautiful and you played it out well. I can't wait for when you ...

Hmm... I do indeed like it, but I think that you could have given little more to it, a little more depth. Just something to have more story and uniqueness, ...

Okay, in a nutshell? Cute. But that's about it. To me, it seems pretty egotistical that you speak so judgementally against a LOT of people simply because of the clothing ...

Hi! I enjoyed this poem very much. It showcases all of the beautiful elements of poetry in one amazing poem. Imagery is astounding in this. I think what gives it ...

Hello, competition! :) My first thought after reading this is I think perhaps you tried to put a lot of story in a little bit of text. for instance, you ...

Hi NafeCT! :) I'd like to begin by saying this poem was marvelous, controversial, yet true to an extent. It's another one of those things wrong in the world that ...

Hi Kitkat! Okay! First of all, welcome to YWS. Glad to have you here :D. You seem to have a rhyme scheme (see what I did there?), of a basic ...

Hi ! At first, I was expecting that I wouldn't like this and it would be some ridiculous children's story that's very cliche. However, I was pleasantly surprised! That twist ...