Flakes of sunshine,
Soiled with brine.
Rays of rain,
Stained with pain.
Nothing is worthwhile-Nothing's worth the wait,
Nothing to make you breathless, yet you suffocate.
You're different-the world fails to acclimate,
If everything's for a reason, what does sorrow resuscitate?
Liquid pearls find their way,
Through stormy night, and calm day.
Leaving a numb moistness in their wake,
Healing your heart- once more for it to break.
Valleys of dreams-shattered and lost
Amidst the snowy pain, and gloomy frost.
Belittled minds, and ridiculed aspirations,
Mocked ideas, and lost inspiration.
The shadowy night masks the pain,
Tears are hidden, as you cry in the rain.
Hearts broken, self-esteem low,
Your heart in shambles, dangling to and fro.
Life isn't heaven, so just raise hell,
Joy is a stranger, gloom has you under it's spell.
Broken and shattered,you lie on the floor,
Broken and shattered-life shows you the door.
Just when it's almost over, a sound rings in your head,
Telling you to be brave, and not give up instead.
Even Alice got her wonderland so why not you?
You're perfect, just like all things magical are true.
Memories of a harsh past, fall throught the seive,
sorrow is burried and happiness is what you recieve.
All it ever takes, is to believe in you,
and to stick with what's right-and all things true.
Be bold-Just Dream.
Escape reality for while, harsh as it may seem.
Just swim with your thoughts,and take a walk with your mind,
and behold what you'll find!
A happier place awaits us all,
through the winter,and after the fall.
Your sunshine smile shall once again be seen,
From Tokyo, all the way to Aberdeen.
Because lost inspiration is once more found,
sorrow has faded away-the joy is profound.
You've shown the universe-You make your own world go round.
Believe in you,in times of doubt,
listen to your heart's whisper, even when your head tends to shout.
Happiness is finally here,
crystallizing thoughts, have made life crystal clear.
The clouds have dissapeared and the sunshine is back,
Life's finally lossened up, and decided to cut you some slack.
So be happy, and dream.
Just believe in your vision, hard as it may seem.
Cuz in the end all that matters is you,
just like all things right, and everything true.
Flakes of sunshine,
telling you it'll be fine.
rays of rain,
Eliminating the pain. 
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Hi!
I enjoyed this poem very much. It showcases all of the beautiful elements of poetry in one amazing poem. Imagery is astounding in this. I think what gives it it's special feel is that as I read it I can picture and relate to what I read. Normally, I'd criticize you for repeating "rain" and "pain", but I decided not to because it gives it that sort of flow- like the poem concludes itself. I admire that.
Your vocabulary is GREAT and you do a mighty good job at keeping the rhyme without using boringly simplistic language. I especially like the rhyme of "acclimate" and "resuscitate".
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~BTM
great poem. great rhyming.
Hey =) I want to tell you a few things about your poem =D First off I thought it was great! The rhyming was good =) There was a lot of emotion in it too. I like how at the start it started out really sad, then it seemsed to get even sadder, but then theres like a break though of hope and happiness towards the end. It really like how it ended happily =D
Also your imagry was really great too. Lines like
Valleys of dreams-shattered and lost
Amidst the snowy pain, and gloomy frost.
I thought gave really good mental pictures =) And your descriptions give it a really professional kindof feel haha =D. Overall I thought your poem was really good, I don't find anything that I could suggest you change. Keep it as it is. Its really pretty and inspiring =D Well done!!!! Keep me updated on more of your works. I'd love to review them!! =]