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Hi TheOffBroadwayAuthor, I really like funny skits and this was definitely one that pulled me, giving us a humours take on what goes on (or can go on) in the ...

Hi Jewel_! Short, sweet, and to the point. A beautiful description and view of youth and old age. I totally agree with you! Just a few quick grammar points and ...

Hi illy7896! This is a great short story! I love mystery and suspense! I'm interested to hear if this was just a small idea or you are wondering where you ...

Hi vannilawriter! This was a very interesting narrative, I could see this being a short play with two people, one being the speaker and the other being Nothing. At first, ...

Hi stygianmoon17 ! I have to agree with the other reviews, it is a very intriguing story, probably because we got to hear the inner dialogue as well which did ...

Hi Lezuli! I absolutely loved the story you built and wrote! I fell in love with all three characters and you did an excellent job with describing this world that ...

Hi Zenith, Wow! I really liked the story you wrote, I love reading science fiction plots and the thought that there are people who can read people's thoughts is a ...

Hi Myre! I like the dystopian story you created, and yes, it is a little confusing with the transitions as it jumps from scene to scene. It isn't a huge ...

Hi Rad Dog! Wow! Just, wow! That was a great story, I loved how you tied things together and this eeriness of it all. The dancing part was smart because ...

Hi spiral! Oooooo, this is very interesting! You definitely have a strong beginning, it really pulls the reader into the story. I always love a good hook! The first scene ...

Hi Blossombriar! Oooo, intriguing! I am getting this X-Men vibe at the end and I like the slow reveal that she is like a walking sun who can burn what ...

Beautiful ending! Like the story you have! I like this type of era. I especially liked how you ended it, "I had finally found my happiness. I had found my ...

Hi Illy! Let me just say, wow! That was beautifully written! I have only dappled in poetry, but you did a great job tying it all together. I especially like ...

Hi ChesTaco, Overall, you got a great story here! It seems to me this story is the skeleton of the complete/full version of the short story. I am a personal ...