Hi vannilawriter!
This was a very interesting narrative, I could see this being a short play with two people, one being the speaker and the other being Nothing. At first, I thought the speaker was actually speaking to themselves or to the void, trying to figure out their solution by themselves, but it wasn't until here, for some reason, did I realize that Nothing is actually a character.
It took one step foreword, and It look one step forward, and It took one step forward, “where is my watch, I can’t find it.”
It was trying not let on, but It was rather upset, “ I love that watch, or rather I used to. Without it, I can’t even tell you how much time passed before I even missed it. I can’t believe that I’ve lost it.”
Nothing replied.
Correct me if I am wrong, but Nothing was actually trying to reply to the speaker, it was actually trying to either help the speaker find the watch or trying to calm them down so that they wouldn't panic. I also like the last part where you don't know what they are saying, like the words are lost in the void of loneliness and we aren't there to listen. It's very intriguing. As the reader, I want to know what they are saying. Mysterious.
Super job! You are very creative to write this, keep up the great work!
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