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Hi Musicandme, your story has great detail, potential for growth and some mystery about it, which is very good. Here is my review: - Paragraphs. The words are chunked together ...

The beauty of fanfiction. I love Harry Potter and was excited to read this twist. Here's my review: - Even though this is fan fiction, the story still needs clarity. ...

This chapter is promising and full of conflict. My review: The only issue is that everything is happening so fast that the reader has no time or knowledge of the ...

Hi Firelight, this is the first piece I have ever read about ISS so well done for writing it. It is a great piece, informative and easy to follow. My ...

I like this poem, everyone has to know where true love comes from, within and not outside. My review: The first part of the poem focuses on beauty ideals yet ...

What an interesting piece. You were able to captivate the reader because now everyone wants to know the guys story. It's a good story. Here's my review: - Avoid too ...

Hello Sherri, I haven't read part one so my review will be about this piece. The story is solid but it seems to be very slow moving. You describe Aether ...

Hello Krosis, you've got a very promising story. However, there is a lot you have to work on in order to make it catch the readers attention. Here's is my ...

What a tragic beautiful piece. The poem is good but you can work on this to make it better - Capitalize the first word in each sentence. This is very ...

Hi Kimmiiee, Very inspiring piece, motivational and symbolic. A few things you can improve about it are: - Punctuation. Make sure the punctuation is not spaced out from the last ...

Now on Chapter 3. I like how the chapters are short and each full of action, that's great to keep readers going. Some reviews: - Continuity. Every chapter is like ...

Awesome voice. Interesting lyrics. The most inspiring songs are those that come from personal experience. I love the chorus most. The only critic I could give, only because this is ...

Interesting piece Danceingtreelf, I have a friend who is going through exactly what you are going through. Believe me, it will get better but in the mean time, allow the ...

The first piece I have ever read set in Malawi, even Africa. Well done Etherealember. It's a work of genius, very fresh and I hope you develop the story to ...

Hello Silverlady, The essay was well written. It is good, I love how you added the Hindi part and just when I was getting to it, it ended. The essay ...