Babanuuk

Wow, this is so creative! Instead of pointing out typos or other mechanical errors, I'd like to offer a suggestion- Take it or leave it. :wink: I think you are ...

You did a fantastic job creating suspense!! That's an honest to goodness skill. Still, if your writing doesn't have intention , the tension unravels and your audience gets lost. This ...

Heyro, Babs here. :D This is such a cool bit of writing. My interpretation: In the beginning the person is looking to the past- symbolized by photographs- and there is ...

I really, really like this piece. Despite what M. says, I do believe you are actually talking about flowers and not grapes; the first four lines are simply a long ...

I really only have one critique, which you've heard already- Colorful word usage. A sprinkling of suspense. An unpredictable punch in the gut. These are things that could improve this ...

Hmm, I cannot be sure if this work is personal or if you are expressing despair at the current state of the world... provoking. :) The first stanza is clutching. ...

This is a great piece of work! Reading it was much like taking a long journey... In your mountain, within the stone and noble ridges of bone; within the Judas ...

Ooo, mystery and intrigue. :o This is a great piece of writing, and certainly very thought provoking. I liked your use of capitalization to point out symbolic objects (that's something ...

Don't you just hate it when a stranger points out every little detail in your writing they think should be changed, then say, "Good job, keep writing! :) " Ha, ...

Oooooh, nice work. Words drip wet, weighty and worthless, God I love alliteration. :) salty splintered from sirens singing, "Sail bayward, sail bayward!" And yet again!! Oh, heart - waning ...

Hey Macs. Thanks for the review. :D I'll try to give a good one in return. There are only a few minor things that caught my attention: I watch from ...

This was probably the most irritating piece of literature I have devoured, but hell. I did devour it. It wasn't until the end that I realized each section wasn't connected ...

Hello Rabbit. This looks like it merits a good, strong review. :) He lies. He is made of lies. He is made of lies, and nothing more. He lives to ...

Hello there! Thanks for reviewing my piece. :) I like this poem a lot, especially because it has purpose!! I will do a step by step review... They march us ...

Oooh, I like this very much. :D What were you before you came to me? Were you the treasure at the bottom of the sea? Were you an angel helping ...