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Hi there! Nice poem. I like the rhyming scheme -- I'm a big fan of structured poetry. :) The topic is a worthy one, too, and I like the narrative ...

Hi there! There's some good stuff here. I'm loving the mailman, the furnace rumbling to life, the scratches in the table... wonderful concrete imagery. And my favorite part was "she ...

I like the topic! I think you could perhaps be a little less heavy-handed in its treatment, though. You know how they say "Show, don't tell"? This could use a ...

Nice start! Good, solid prose here. Some details about what people and place looked like, smelled like, tasted like would be helpful. I'm having trouble picturing the characters and setting ...

Cliffhanger! Haha always a nice touch. Thanks for good grammar, spelling etc. I like your phrases (fingers dancing around the edge of the bathtub, the feeling of the first string ...

Interesting. A noble topic to take on. Some tips: - You could make your argument stronger by bringing supporting facts to the table, like you do in the penultimate paragraph ...

Liking it! "Roughing" is a great verb. Great ending, although I had to read it twice to get how the shooting star fit in, whether it was real or not. ...

Hi there! I like the twist into this sadder, deeper feeling about being alone. That love for the beat and sadness at not having anyone to share it with. The ...

Hahaha, the old "Who's on first?" routine, eh? I was laughing! Thanks for taking the time to write this out properly, with good grammar, spelling, etc. Can't be overestimated! Short ...

Hi there! :D Awww... your mom will love it! Happy birthday to her! Now, about the writing. The most powerful lines in this for me were "She's right there, the ...

Hi again! :D Mmmm. As in "a damp place", your imagery is often powerful. But I'm not sure the intent of this poem was as complex. I love the last ...

Love it. Really, truly love it. Hard to pick a favorite bit but it might be this: "but dear Io, dear lace, dear you&me, forgive me my apostasies, forgive me ...

Hi there Gandolph H.! Nice name; interesting spelling. ;) I love geology! So glad someone picked a geologic topic to investigate! Thanks for that. The facts are quite accurately represented, ...

Sorry for your loss! This has a very graceful sound to it. "It was intimate now intricate"... very pretty. Two things that would help this poem however are more concrete ...

Ooh, I like this. Love the idea, and very well executed. I particularly like the way you cut to the chase with the first few lines ("two youths" is so ...