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By period I meant the dot after Mrs. You just put Mrs

Thank you so much!!! I'm really glad you liked, and I will use your suggestions because they are good. Thanks for being so polite about the errors I made. I ...

I'm sorry, I'm kind of new. Plus I can be a total airhead. But how do you delete a comment?

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Sorry for that, didn't mean to. But I see that nobody has reviewed this and that always makes me sad, so I would love. Even though I know nothing about ...

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Hi! This is a fun little story, but there are some errors so I'll just point them out for you: In the second paragraph you forgot the space between shaking. ...

Hi! This is a very interesting story so far and I think that you can do great things with it. Although I have some tips: In the first paragraph you ...

Target on our heads means that people are after you maybe. Or that you have a gun pointed at your head. It pretty much means that you are wanted. I ...

This interesting, but I'm a little confused. I feel like you rushed into it a little. I don't know who the characters are or what they look like. But it ...

This being a prologue, I think you did a good job grabbing the readers attention. Also you did a fine job in descriptions. Are you going to be continuing the ...

This is a very interesting story. I loved the descriptive words in it, and I the part when we realized why you chose to title it, A Blink of an ...