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BEASTtheHUN

BEASTtheHUN

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: you aren't in love, you're just lonely

    Oof, I love this poem so much. Seeing that there are no reviews I will go ahead and give one. There's nothing you can do to fix it. Well, maybe, ...

    Jul 12, 2021
  • Short Story » Realistic, Satire Re: The NETWORK.

    I like this artsy way you wrote it. But I am confused by some things is Maxx the same MaXx. I think you should clear that up. The idea is ...

    Jun 21, 2021
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: Solamente Mi

    First things first, I love your first two lines. They are intriguing and make you want to read more. There are some confusing lines, but since I am no poetry ...

    May 27, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Chapter 12

    You know I like your story a lot. So this piece, I think, is really good. Unlike @MailicedeNamedy I do not think this chapter is rushed, but do not just ...

    May 26, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, General Re: Ashwater Creek - Ch. 1.1

    Wow, I L-O-V-E this story. The flow is very nice, it's enviable. That's the best way to put it. From a writer to a fellow writer, this is amazing. The ...

    May 21, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Dramatic Re: No Witnesses, Pt. 4

    This is chilling, I mean, I won't be able to sleep tonight. The husband is an emotional and physiological mess, he is terrifying. I like the part where he talked ...

    May 20, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Chapter 7

    I like this text. The fight scene is nice, I have been waiting for it, and I have not been disappointed. I like how each chapter builds on the other, ...

    May 17, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense Re: The story of curse of a rose: Chapter 1

    This is a nice piece. I thought at the end she would heal the rose, but boy was I wrong. Next time I go near a rose I definitely will ...

    May 12, 2021
  • Article / Essay » Narrative, Realistic Re: Guilty Pleasures

    This is really good. The Humanistic qualities (that's the best way I can say it). The description of her life was nice, in a depressing sort of way. I like ...

    May 10, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Chapter 6

    I like the dream sequence, it was really well written. Some people I see struggle with dream sequences, but I think you did a good job. The cliffhanger is good. ...

    May 6, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Politics Re: (DRAFT) Miscreants: Inauguration - Chapter 2.2

    There is a nice build-up of tension in this story. I like how the dialogue highlights the uncertainty felt by pretty much everyone. It's kind of like walking on glass, ...

    May 4, 2021
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: My Sister

    I love this poem. For someone who has an abundance of siblings (15), I personally have had some bad blood with my sister. She sees me as an annoying younger ...

    May 3, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Chapter 4

    I like the hopelessness you installed into this text. It doesn't have the same details of the first couple of chapters, but it does have the same feeling invoking. You ...

    Apr 19, 2021
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Literature Re: Chapter 1- A New Fairytale

    Interesting, I find this very intriguing. I really like the last sentence. It has a nice hook to it. I may be being nit-picky, but this seems like more of ...

    Apr 15, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, General Re: Everyone She Ever Loves Will Die - Chapter 2

    I like this piece of work. It has a reflective quality about it that makes it very enjoyable to read. The limited dialogue fits this piece of work very well. ...

    Apr 15, 2021


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