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Nitpicks I turned on my iPod and turned it to the angriest-sounding song I had. --I don't like the repetition of "turned" in this sentence. Maybe "switched" (either instance) or ...

Hi, Camille! Sorry I haven't gotten this to you earlier *grumbles excuses* I'll do separate reviews for part one and part two. Part one... Nitpicks Under other circumstances, I would ...

Hello there! Could you please seperate your paragraphs before posting? If you have all your text bunched up like this it gets hard to read. For example, rather than: There ...

Hello! :) Firstly, I want to make it clear that I don't know much about poetry. I'll try to do my best, though, and I hope it's helpful. :D Why ...

Nitpicks His father, Iitska Sorana I, was the King of a place named Kuushiika (Koo/Sh/Kah). When Iitsuka was about sixteen, he was introduced to a girl named Kiinik Morona (Key/Nick_Moh/Roh/Nah), ...

-Nitpicks- The old man at the gas station plucked a shaft of the long grass that grew from spaces between the concrete slabs and slid it into one of the ...

Hello. Nitpicks first... I want to tell you The legend about Georgia - Sakartvelo: When Godfather allotted lands to a mankind, Georgians where not there. I think "when" before "godfather" ...

Hi, Mizz-icy! I'm sorry that this didn't work out with the contest (I swear, we had no idea you had entered!) and I don't know if it's your fault or ...

Hi. I'm sorry I couldn't get this to you sooner, I've been real busy and haven't been able to get on YWS at all, really. -Nitpick- Twelve forty eight in ...

Hello! I'm back. -Nitpicks- He was embarrassing me! I was blushing so hard. I agree with Alainna in that you really don't need that first sentence. After dinner everyone went ...

I didn't really read the other peoples' nitpicks, just the overalls. If I repeat something, please forgive me. :D -Nitpicks- My mother has to go to another room she’s crying ...

Again, I just skimmed the other reviews, so please pardon me if I repeat something. -Nitpicks- The mansion in which Carrie lived was out of sight, despite how big it ...

Hello! I only skimmed the other peoples' reviews, so I might repeat stuff... but please find it in your heart to forgive me. :P -Nitpicks- So tall that it would ...

Hello! I'm back. -Nitpicks- Jumping onto my bed I grabbed my phone. I think there should be a comma before "I" and after "bed." I quieted my breath, and I ...

-Nitpicks- Any job will do at this point; he just wants to think of something else. This might just be me, but When I hear someone say "think of something," ...