Azila

Hullo! It turns out I could review this sooner than I thought, so here goes. ^.^ Alright, so I had a few nit-picky comments, but I think Pinky pointed most ...

Hullo! Her house was dim and the shadows padded apologetically down the halls. Quite possibly my favorite line in the whole piece. Even the mail on her hallway table seemed ...

Hullo, Sir! I really don't have time to do this review, but oh well -- here goes. ^.^ For all he knew, today could have been easier than scoring an ...

Hullo. Alright, so I'm assuming that since you did this as a fight-scene exercise, you aren't really looking for line-by-line nitpicks,but rather you'd like more general overall comments -- right? ...

Hullo there! I'm a little short on time, so I'm going to have to make this quick. What she found when was walked outside was a little statue in the ...

Greetings, good sir-who's-actually-a-madam-but-whom-I-will-eternally-refer-to-as-sir! It looks like you've already gotten a lot of nitpicky criticism, so I will (once again) try not to be overly nit-p

Hullo! I'm not going to do any little nit-picks because seeminglymeaningless seems to have done that pretty well, and I didn't notice many mistakes or awkward moments. So, onto the ...

Hullo there! I have to say, after reading your intro and spoiler it was really hard to go on to the story itself without preconceptions. I understand you don't like ...

Hi carbon! This was quite entertaining -- and not at all what I expected! I'm not sure what I did expect, but I don't think this was it. ^.^ Anyway, ...

Hi! I'm back. This may just be because you just did a lot of editing and rewriting, but there were a few awkward phrases and strange punctuation issues and such. ...

Hello! I'm here, as requested... though it seems like you've had a lot of reviews already, so I'm not sure how much help lil ol' me will be, but it ...

Hullo! I probably shouldn't be reviewing this, seeing as we're competitors, but oh well. :] It was completely dark except for the cellphone light that was only slightly muffled by ...

Hi! Ilovebubbles123 has already pointed out most of the little errors and such, so I think I'll skip that and just talk about the story on a whole. The plot ...

Greetings! Baby dear, take our love. It was never ours to give, but we know you'll accept it. I love this line... but I have to admit I'm a little ...

Hullo! We could be, and we could do anything we wanted to. This was a tad confusing to me. You mean that they could be anything they wanted and they ...