AyumiGosu17

Hmm. I like it. And I get the metaphor: you're not discussing a butterfly, but a girl with a wounded spirit. Am I right? But here's a little help for ...

Yeah, uh, sorry, but I couldn't finish reading this. Halfway through, I was...shutting down on it. Here are my main problems with it. Note: my comments are in blue, and ...

Ooh. I like it. Very classic. Very smooth. It sounds almost like one of those 1700s era poems. Fabulous! (Yeah, sorry...we're studying poetry in my English class right now, from ...

sweet! I know this feeling all too well. I felt that way before getting involved with boyfriend, and now we've been together for a year and two months. So, maybe ...

Este es yo. Soy fuerte; soy valiente. Yo rompo; yo sangro. Yo duelo; yo lloro. Puedo aguantar contra los corrientes. Este es yo. No. No es correcto. Uh, try this ...

Hmm. I never would have thought of them as three separate poems. They are so closely related, so closely entwined, it makes better sense to keep it as one long ...

Winged Crossing Prologue Shining brightly, the full moon lit the night sky. It created a faint yellow glow, while the stars created tiny dots of radiance around it. Below the ...

Hmm...rip it apart, huh? You shouldn't have said that , not to an explicator-in-training! :lol: :wink: But on a more serious note, I like this. Completely. I like the style, ...

NICE! If you had written this to me, I would jump on you in a heartbeat, showing you gratitude. :lol: :wink: It's very clear and straightforward, but it's not pushy ...

It's adorable! I love it! There's only one place that seems a bit out of rhythm: The world to me was harmlessand filled with childlike joy. When life was all ...

Wow. I love it when it rhymes; I cannot rhyme, and I envy you for that. But the main things I love about this are 1) how it flows. It's ...

Wow. Deja v'u... I've felt like this once. This time last year, I felt the same way, and I feel that your poem demonstrates and defines that feeling of being ...

Absolutely beautiful. It's almost like a prayer, so sincere and true. If it is one, I know He answered it for you! The words you use are so captivating; I ...

It seems almost like a rap, but hey, that's poetry for you. Your style is your own; if anyone tells you otherwise, ignore them. No two poets will ever be ...

I like it. Very smooth and to the point. It's almost like I can picture it. Just one problem, in line 13, you wrote "message have"...either make "message" plural or ...