Audy

Kamas, I told you my initial thoughts, and now that I am re-reading this in complete silence with my focus intact, I'm wondering how I ever got confused in the ...

LosCadaver, We meet again. I like this here, I like the rhythm and the idea of time in battle. I'm wondering, why in-time and not just "time" ? Though I ...

Ah, Quentin Tarantino. I love all the movies mentioned, but I wanted to do a shout-out to Bridesmaids , a seriously hilarious film that made the entire audience (and me) ...

Lisa M Cooper, I like the concept for this piece. I like how the speaker keeps reiterating his/her assurance that everything will be alright, everything is going to be okay ...

Kyllorac, Absolutely loved, loved, loved this. Now I apologize beforehand if my own interpretation may be a little off - but is this an apocalyptic tale told from the moon's ...

Michaeld, Haha. This made me laugh inappropriately. Kudos xD It's an enjoyable read - and I can see what Dreamwalker meant with the flash fiction resemblance. As it is, there's ...

Chezka, Hello! Just want to say welcome to YWS. I hope you are liking your first week. As you probably have already seen, this community is filled with lots of ...

Lunasol, I enjoyed reading this as a contemplative piece of poetry. The structure really aided that, the way the lines break mid-thought, reminds me of thought bubbles, or stream-of-consciousness. I ...

Dreamwalker, Almost didn't recognize you with your change of av. But I do love your poems. I love how I can read this two, three, four times and pick up ...

Thersites, I'm back for more, and decidedly so. This was inspiring. The details that you've used to craft these images came together well, so when I got to the end ...

Confused.pirate, Absolutely love this! The style and sounds are excellent, and it was executed well. The imagery, as Sassykat mentioned was clear and well thought out. I particularly was engrossed ...

thersites, I like this a lot. Definitely a unique take. There's a musicality in this and the images here are captivating. I would agree with misstoria; proper punctuation can really ...

Brokenskyre, I like the expressions of the piece. I get a sense of the raw emotions that are present here. However, because of the line breaks, it reads a little ...

Crescent, Immediately, I thought the narrative and imagery was moving, if a bit sad. Without the spoiler I would've never thought it was about a duckling though - I mean, ...

Rascalover, At first I had no idea this was the opening scene of a novel since it reads so much like a short story. There are pros and cons to ...